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Troubleshooting
Jan. 8th, 2009 08:53 amI’ve been toiling with a particular chapter of my novel for an embarrassingly long period of time, and even though I’m nervous about doing it, I’m going to post what I’ve drafted here in the interest of seeking feedback. Mostly, I’m okay with the bit that’s drafted so far, it’s the part that remains unwritten that is giving me trouble.
Here’s the deal: The goal of this chapter is to develop Julie’s soon-to-be-boss Theresa as a character, and to explain how Julie goes from applying for a lifeguarding job to landing a position as an events assistant at the community center where the scene is taking place. I’ve gotten as far as Theresa asking some basic interview questions, and trying to subtly steer Julie away from wanting to lifeguard, but I’m not sure how she switches gears and turns the conversation towards the events opening. She needs to talk it up, to sell Julie on what a great opportunity it would be, and make Julie feel like she is special to be getting the offer of that job in the first place. At some point, I also need the Arturo kid mentioned at the beginning of the scene to return with their food, because while he’s in the office he is supposed to request one of the fliers posted on the corkboard, which Julie in turn has to pull down since she is closest to it. And in doing so, she learns that the community center is hosting a wrestling event, the one where she will unexpectedly reconnect with her childhood friend Tim and through a turn of events, wind up part of the show.
I’m not sure why I can’t figure out how to make this work. The scene keeps stalling out and it’s very frustrating. If any of you can take a look and offer suggestions/questions, I will be forever in your debt.
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Here’s the deal: The goal of this chapter is to develop Julie’s soon-to-be-boss Theresa as a character, and to explain how Julie goes from applying for a lifeguarding job to landing a position as an events assistant at the community center where the scene is taking place. I’ve gotten as far as Theresa asking some basic interview questions, and trying to subtly steer Julie away from wanting to lifeguard, but I’m not sure how she switches gears and turns the conversation towards the events opening. She needs to talk it up, to sell Julie on what a great opportunity it would be, and make Julie feel like she is special to be getting the offer of that job in the first place. At some point, I also need the Arturo kid mentioned at the beginning of the scene to return with their food, because while he’s in the office he is supposed to request one of the fliers posted on the corkboard, which Julie in turn has to pull down since she is closest to it. And in doing so, she learns that the community center is hosting a wrestling event, the one where she will unexpectedly reconnect with her childhood friend Tim and through a turn of events, wind up part of the show.
I’m not sure why I can’t figure out how to make this work. The scene keeps stalling out and it’s very frustrating. If any of you can take a look and offer suggestions/questions, I will be forever in your debt.
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